Review of Natural Witch

Natural Witch is a paranormal romance novel by K.F. Breene. This is the 1st book in the Magical Mayhem series.

She’d Always Known She Was Different

Growing up, she’d never fit in. She was always the odd one out. The misfit.

Things are not always as they seem.

Deep inside of her is a power… waiting to get out.

But unfortunately, a powerful organization would harness that magic for its own.

Thankfully, she is not alone…

He’s An Outlaw With A Troubled Past

He hasn’t been back for three years. Not since they killed his brother.

But past crimes must not go unpunished.

He is back for vengeance. To set matters to rights.

He had no idea she would stumble across his path…

And change his whole world.

Sometimes an author has so much to say, they have a problem getting it on paper in a way that’s easy for the reader to grasp.

The story is about a girl who finds out she has magical abilities and when she goes to learn about them, she stumbles into a crazy new world.

It sounds like a great premise for a story, right? Well, I’ll be honest, it’s a hot mess right from the start.

What attracted me to this book was #1 she is a USA Today Bestselling author and this particular book was one of the top 5 best-selling paranormal romance books. That in itself is an impressive accomplishment, considering it is a self-published novel.

The book has only been out a month and it already has over 260 reviews – 84% of which are 5 stars. Sounds like a real winner, right?

I’m sorry to say it just wasn’t.

The book was scattered and confusing and tried too hard to shove so much down your throat at first that you just couldn’t get into the overall story or even keep up with it all for that matter. I really tried but I just couldn’t get into this story. The constant switching of POVs was choppy and the overall story felt like she could have used a lot of assistance cleaning it up. You just couldn’t help but feel she had this grand idea for a story in her head and struggled to get it all out.

While trying to get through the book I found myself having to go back and forth trying to keep up with the story. It was all just so poorly organized.

Beyond the problems with the story, there were more than a few typos and grammatical issues with the book. It was clear the author didn’t spend any real money on getting it professionally polished.

Also, I’m sorry but she just couldn’t keep her own characters straight. The main character is apparently clumsy while at the same time remarkably agile. And even more impressive is that she’s a basket case but calm under pressure. Okay then …. you can’t throw in descriptions to try and make her relatable and then throw them out when they no longer suit the story.

Another problem is the main character’s age is 24, although by what goes on in the book, you wouldn’t know that. You would swear she was 15 or 16. It’s not just because she still lives at home with her mother but because her mother treats her like a 12-year-old. It’s all very awkward. I found myself going back just to make sure that I read it right that she was in fact 24 years old.

If you are looking for a good paranormal romance, I would say skip this one. It’s just not worth it.